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ApoKolypse
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Joined: Thu Jan 05, 2006 12:00 am Posts: 8388 Location: London
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 So, I got bored,
and I started rhyming.
Experiment of falsified merriment
Feigning sentience, incandescence
Me stultiloquent, you melliloquent,
Now I've become multiloquent.
Trying to explain the placement;
a premature replacement - emotional defacement
subsequent consequences
an attachment became a detriment-
-when it happened too fast
bypassed chaste, aghast
cast in front a blast
from which there's no recovery
no discovery of a scene
to differently convene,
to intervene in the dream
and tell myself to stop-
-callously dismiss
or miss that first kiss
now I'm listless.
Thinking like a pessimist.
pertaining to refraining
from the straining and restraint
rain freezing my brain
ingraining an image-
-I'd be trying to forget
Yet, beget this regret;
Montague to Capulet,
I've become a silhouette.
now I ask you,
critique my poem-speak
is it unique or antique,
do I tweak my technique?
So this silhouette cannot forget
the Capulet he won't regret
though his kiss still tastes
like her last cigarette.
Admittedly the last stanza was similar to the third-from-last in every way shape and form.
I got bored and decided to start rhyming. I intended it only to be a couple lines long, and I didn't plan on wasting others' time with reading it. But, there it is. Feel free to bash it, it's the only way I'll get better. Keep in mind there is no attempt at real rhythm, grammar or really any proper writing skill.
EDIT: Sorry for the first stanza... I like words like that.
_________________Jonn "ApoKolypse" Leonard www.twitch.tv/45Bananas
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 2:23 pm |
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Tazzaler
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Joined: Wed Jul 23, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 5727 Location: Dakota, North
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I can rhyme too
I once fucked a goat
I wore it's ass like a coat
it made a hoot and a holler
damn I looked good F*CKING that goat with my popped collar
oh and I can rhyme even more, this one its for the romantic type
Roses are red
weed is green
if I get you in bed
you won't be so mean
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 2:43 pm |
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Pyrokid
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Joined: Tue Jan 10, 2006 12:00 am Posts: 2334 Location: Texas
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I enjoyed half of it, then my mind started to wander so I put it in the fridge and decided to enjoy the rest later.
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 3:51 pm |
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Ruger9
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Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 542 Location: NY
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you are whaT I call a dictionary rapper. but i can rhyme too.
there i was walkin with a boner
look to my left, your moms on the corner
i put it in her ass then to her mouth
9 months later you popped out
she claimed it was mine i said bullshit
i would never touch that clit, even with a stolen dick
i slapped her in the mouth for lyin
F*CK payin the bitch, she aint worth buyin
and for the romantic type:
roses are red
AFRICAN AMERICANS are black
that was my baby batter
that landed on your back
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 5:20 pm |
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ApoKolypse
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Joined: Thu Jan 05, 2006 12:00 am Posts: 8388 Location: London
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The first stanza was definitely just to use those words after I thought of them.
It wasn't meant to be poetry or anything, I was just rhyming.
_________________Jonn "ApoKolypse" Leonard www.twitch.tv/45Bananas
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 5:39 pm |
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Ruger9
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Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 542 Location: NY
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ApoKolypse wrote: The first stanza was definitely just to use those words after I thought of them.
It wasn't meant to be poetry or anything, I was just rhyming.
i know man....i was just havin some good ol' fun
LAWL Yellow_Flash_Colorz_PDT_06
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 7:10 pm |
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MIKE
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Joined: Sat Nov 19, 2005 12:00 am Posts: 2810 Location: Playing TF2.
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Educating AFRICAN AMERICANS is bad~
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 7:59 pm |
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the_yeti
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Joined: Mon Mar 31, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 974
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"There once was a man from St. Martin
Who saved all his odors from Fartin'
If it passed through his crack, it went straight in a sack
And mistakes were all kept in a carton"
- George Carlin
RIP
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| Mon Nov 03, 2008 8:42 pm |
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Falcon
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Joined: Fri Sep 30, 2005 11:00 pm Posts: 5230 Location: Rogers, AR
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lol apok, we need to find you a hobby
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SK-XIII
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_________________AngryKitten wrote: I may never admin C*CK you.
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 1:59 am |
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the_yeti
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i CANNOT F*CKING stand f*cking stupid andy milonkis. he's not funny at all. not even a little. watching his dumb show makes me dumber. i could almost feel IQ points leaking out of my ears. I dont give a greasy sh*t that he has some disease that makes him look like a retarded 14 year-old for the rest of his life. his "brand" of comedy isn't funny in the slightest.
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doublesven
I have NO life....
Joined: Sun Jun 29, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 2552
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^^^^^^^^
dude i agree 100%
_________________AngryKitten wrote: I bought a SuckerTech 18" Gaming Dildo a couple of days ago from a local dildo peddler.
It was probably one of the worst $209 investments I've ever made. I find it is extremely hard to play video games with a giant dick in your ass.
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 2:14 am |
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ApoKolypse
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Joined: Thu Jan 05, 2006 12:00 am Posts: 8388 Location: London
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On a related note
One of the best up-and-coming rappers I've seen in a while. Check out Wax, he's got some pretty great shit out.
http://ca.youtube.com/watch?v=F0kQjTyEIvs
_________________Jonn "ApoKolypse" Leonard www.twitch.tv/45Bananas
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 2:54 am |
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the_yeti
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ok, that was pretty ill. he sounds eminem'ish at certain points
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 3:18 am |
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Deepslit
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Joined: Sun Jul 31, 2005 11:00 pm Posts: 2103 Location: Tampa, FL
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Pyrokid wrote: I enjoyed half of it, then my mind started to wander so I put it in the fridge and decided to enjoy the rest later.
Wish I could do that with my mind.
And agreed about Yeti's rant on Milonokis.
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 7:29 am |
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Ruger9
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Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 542 Location: NY
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wow when he spits in the car.....amazing!!!!
and he makes his own music with keyboard bass and guitar.
very unique and versatle
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 10:04 am |
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MIKE
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Joined: Sat Nov 19, 2005 12:00 am Posts: 2810 Location: Playing TF2.
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Great + rapper = oxymoronic.
The rant on Andy is so true. People just want to love him cause he's retarded. Same reason people want to love the Dark Knight, cause the dumb cunt offed himself.
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State_Radio
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Joined: Mon Jun 16, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 924
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http://ca.youtube.com/watch?v=yoN6XfyQsr4
English Rap
I hope you are proud fishkilla/proff
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Mantis
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Joined: Wed Aug 03, 2005 11:00 pm Posts: 745 Location: Miramar, FL
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Falcon wrote: lol apok, we need to find you a hobby
Maybe a girlfriend, or boyfriend, or both. w/e makes him happy Yellow_Flash_Colorz_PDT_06
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 1:45 pm |
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Tazzaler
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Joined: Wed Jul 23, 2008 11:00 pm Posts: 5727 Location: Dakota, North
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Mantis wrote: Falcon wrote: lol apok, we need to find you a hobby Maybe a girlfriend, or boyfriend, or both. w/e makes him happy Yellow_Flash_Colorz_PDT_06
F*CK it give him a tranny
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| Tue Nov 04, 2008 2:24 pm |
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